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In the one day morning,one of the my classmates was absent the class.Then the teacher and me are all doubted that.so after the class,we all went to the dormitory to found she.when we found the student whoes faces was bad,and the sweat was flowing.The next time,we putted she to hosiptal as soon as prossible.At the hosiptal,the doctor said that she has a cold.But my header has also stay at ,and to looked after her until she was felt well.and the second day all the student went to the hosiptal to visited she and chatted with she. From this experence,i study many things what can't learn from the book.The love between the people is Precious and touching,and this experence will not dead.
