2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

文中词汇表达比较多样，能多用学术词汇就更好了；作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用。

Today,there is a common phenomenon--excessive packaging.I think many people have this kind of experience that we buy a thing with a beautiful box but the thing itself is not as nice as we thought.What do lead to it? In my opinion,It's for two reasons.The first,the sellers,in order to attract more customers,would make his goods more beautiful.The second,sometimes we buy a good not for using but for giving it to others.So we would expect the goods looks well.Because of customers's require,the excessive packaging then comes. For me,I think the phenomenon should be limited.The excessive packaging goods often more expensive.But we don't need to cost more money on a box.So I call on people unit to object to excessive packaging.Let's do it from the little thing and from now on.