文中词汇表达不够丰富,学术词汇方面要多累积;在平时练习中应增加词汇量的积累;上下文衔接手法不熟练,没有能够有效的使用衔接词;请注意分段。
Recently, the haze weather has happened to many cities in the north of China.It brought much trouble to people. Such as it made people cough.Many accidents in the haze weather because drivers cannot see outside. People have outdoor activities are not healthy. So,shcool have to stop having PE class. For this reason,I think we should try to walk or ride the bike to work.