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With the development of people's living conditions,more and more people have their own cars. Some of us think it good to own a car. Firstly,it's a convenient,fast and comfortable means of transportation tool. You can go to a lot of places at any time. Secondly,it shows that people are becoming richer,and the country stronger. It also makes businesses and industries develop faster. Others have different opinions. They think that cars give off waste gas and pollute the environment. Too many cars will have some bad effects,such as more accidents. Besides,parking cars is another big problem. Maybe people should think carefully before they buy a car.