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Teachers and schoolmates,today I'm very gald to be there as a candidate of the chairman of the student union,please allow me to introduce myself briefly.I'm a monitor in the past two years,during this time,I tried my best to running the routine of my class,and gained some managerial experences I never learned before,which would be important for this position.I'm a positive and vigorous person,rather than staying in the office,I'd like to go out and face some difficulty and get something done.In my spare time I like playing basketball,in which I can learn how to play a role in the team and help my teammate to play well. If I am in this position,I will engage to arrange more activities both scholastic and social,and improve our diet,and any other things which you demand.Thanks for your attention,please give me a chance,I will never disappoint you.
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