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I have a good friend,her name is xiaofang,she is 11 years old and is a student.She likes to sing and dance.We play together ofen.She is a beautiful girl and she likes to help other people.She likes green.She has a old brother,She loves her family.She goes to bed at 10 pm. and gets up at 7 am.