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Nowadays there are more and more parents help there children do everything that should be done by there children themselves.It is estimated that eveytime wo are a child in parents eyes.So how should parents help children to be independent is a urgent topic. Why they help there children do everything? I think the reason can be sum up as that they love us ,and don't want us get any hurt. So,to make children more independent,there are something that parents should do on it.First,just give them more time to plan themslves.second parents don't need help them do everything,just trust them that they can do it well,and support them.When time gose by,I am sure that your child will be an independent person.