文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;希望学术词汇的使用能更熟练一些,还要加强单词拼写的检查。
Nowadays,we can see more beautifully packaged when we go outside, extraordinary in the festival.What is more, all our friends would give our gift with a beautifully packaged.And the seller would tend to suggest the thing which with a beautifully packaged to consumers.For instance,the mooncakes,it is to look like that the package more expensiver than mooncakes.Also the phone would have a nice packag. I think there are some reason for excessive,The first is that we think the beautiful packag will give us more face.And it is also can be remerber and regnize by the wan who you want to pleasured.The secend is that seller would get more benifical form the packaging.The last one is that some one think the excessive packaging can highlight the stuate to himself. In my opinion,I think it is jeopardize for the envirment.It is wasting the resource.To ease the problem of this we should give up the way in excessive packaging as soon as possible.And the goverment should make a better low to restrict the phenomemon of this.So we can have an well-being tomorrw.