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2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

发布时间:2013-05-17 11:41浏览次数:9778
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题目 On Excessive Packaging
要求
1.目前许多商品存在过度包装的现象
2.出现这一现象的原因
3.我对这一现象的看法和建议
字数:120满分:100分
用户的作文(系统评分63.5分
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作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;文中能较熟练地使用一定的学术词汇,但词汇表达多样性不高,拼写检查还需加强。

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Nowadays,we can see more beautifully packaged when we go outside, extraordinary in the festival.What is more, all our friends would give our gift with a beautifully packaged.And the seller would tend to suggest the thing which with a beautifully packaged to consumers.For instance,the mooncakes,it is to look like that the package more expensive than mooncakes.Also the phone would have a nice package. I think there are some reason for excessive packaged.The first is that we think the beautiful package will give us more proud.And it is also can be remerber and regine by the wan who you want to make a nice possision.The secend is that seller would get more benifical form the packaging.The last one is that some one think the excessive packaging can highlight the stuate to himself. In my opinion,I think it is jeopardize for the envirment.It is wasting the resource.To ease the problem of this we should give up the way in excessive packaging as soon as possible.And the goverment should make a better low to restrict the phenomemon of this.So we can have an well-being tomorrw.

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