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Nowadays,we can see more beautifully packaged when we go outside, extraordinary in the festival.What is more, all our friends would give our gift with a beautifully packaged.And the seller would tend to suggest the thing which with a beautifully packaged to consumers.For instance,the mooncakes,it is to look like that the package more expensive than mooncakes.Also the phone would have a nice package. Here are some reason for the phenomenon of excessive packaged.The first is that we think the beautiful package will give us more proud.And it is also can be remerber and notice by the wan who you want to make a nice impression.The second is that seller would get more beneficial form the packaging.The last one is that some one may think the excessive packaging can highlight the stuate to himself. In my opinion,I think it is jeopardize for the envirment.It is wasting the resource.To ease the problem of this we should give up the way in excessive packaging as soon as possible.And the goverment should make a better low to restrict the phenomemon of this.So we can have an well-being tomorrw.
