复杂句采用很棒;请注意文中用词的丰富度以及单词拼写,学术词汇的希望能更熟练一些;结构不严谨,几乎没有使用衔接词,上下文衔接欠流畅。
With the improvement of high technology in the modern time, the internet has effected our life in many aspects. We take lessons, watch movies and comminicate with our friends and so on, we can't leave internet in some way. It's a fact that the internet has brought much convenience to our life, but every coin has two sides, so does the internet. One obvious problem is that we spend too much time on communicating with others through internet, which make us silent in real life. Because we are addicted into a virtual world that internet make up for us, we enjoy communicating by this way, day by day, we rarely go out to play with real friends, maybe we will forget how to comminicate with real person some day. that's too terrible! As far as I'm concerned, though the internet have a lot of advantages, we must effec our time in a appropriate way. Communicating in internet can't replace the time which we spend with our friends,.Go out more, gain more.
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