学术词汇使用较丰富,拼写做的很棒;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
Nowadays,we can see more beautifully packaged when we go outside, extraordinary in the festival.What is more, all our friends would give our gift with a beautifully packaged.Because the seller always suggest the thing with a beautifully packaged to consumers.For instance,the mooncakes,it is to look like that the package more expensive than mooncakes.Also the phone would have a nice package. Here are some reason for the phenomenon of excessive packaged.The first is that we think the beautiful package will give us more proud.And it is also can be remerber and notice by the wan who you want to make a nice impression.The second is that seller would get more beneficial form the packaging.The last one is that some one may think the excessive packaging can highlight the status. In my opinion,I think it is jeopardizing for the environment.It is wasting the resource.To ease the problem of this we should give up the way in excessive packaging as soon as possible.And the government should make a better legal to restrict the phenomenon of this.So we can have an well-being tomorrows.