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假设你是某公司销售助理王海，请给David Smith先生写一封回信，内容包括：
1感谢对方订购100箱衬衫；
2建议用纸箱而不用木箱装运，并列举纸箱的优点；你公司最近与别的美国公司交易中也用过纸箱，效果很好；
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Dear David Smith
行文稍显不流畅，应增加文中衔接词的使用；可适当增加从句和复杂句的使用，注意文中的几处句子错误；文章用了较为丰富的词汇，学术词汇略显单薄，同时注意单词拼写的检查；请注意分段；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
At first,I want to say thanks to you for that you burchased one hundred boxes T-shirts.then I have some snall advices hope you can accept.I think paper box are better than wooden box,for example ,paper box is not heave as wooden to transport and do less harm to enviroment.Above all,our company also used paper box to transport to our partner ,a America firm,accently.And the effect is satisfactory. Looking forword your reply
