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the impact of the internet on interpersonal communication with internet is used in the globle,it makes our world not further.we can make friends with other countries,it is never happened in history.however,at same time,it takes many disadvantage. the youth like communication online every day and every time,even every minitues,thus they dislike take a conversation with people in real world,particularly their parents and lovers.it leads contradict each other,such as quarel,divorce,complain and even suicide.for these things,i think we could sit down to talk with each other for solve our problem.it is important that face to face for take conversation than talking online,it could add trust and emotion.and talking on qq or msm is so cold and stranger.
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