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Working Hard and Keeping Fit I have a best friend, his name is Chen hua. These days he has changed a lot. Because he understand what important the health have. At past. He always stay up late at night and never take part in sports and school activies. And then. He felt stange one day. What a pity! He had a bad cold. He can't study and just stay at bad to sleep. The doctor says that he must have more and more exercise to in good health. After that, he often runs to school and rides bike on weekdays. The doctor says keep doing these. He will be better soon.