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Recently,with the faster devolpment of society,more and more students pay attention to learning foreign cultrues,as a result,they not like spending much time on learning Chinese. I think there are several reasons for this phenomenon.In one hands, with the using of the Internet,student may be attrated by the foreign cultures and want to learn something that they never know before.Theremore,they will have fun to learn the new things.In another hands, they hold an opinion that,learning Chinese doesn’t meet with the require of the society,and they think Chinese are traditional,which make them boring. So, learning foreign cultures is a good chioce for them to strenthen themselves.Moreover,when they learn foreign cultures,they prefer to have a western festivels,such as Chrismas, Valentine's Day and so on.At the same time,they forget our own festivals, such as Spring Festivals, Mid-Autumn Festival, Qingming Festivals. As for me,I think it is nessary for us to learn Chinese,because they are our traditional cultules,which is our cherish wealth.So,when we draw our attention to learn foreign cultures, but,at the same time,we must not forget to learn our Chinese.