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I have good friend named Snow, who is a smart and handsome young man.He likes playing badmiton and cycling. I know him since we studied in the same primary school. And we live near to each other.He is not very tall, undoubtingly shorter than me . However, he usually has other's girls hearts while I am not, which makes me kind of jealous of him.