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As we know,more and more Chinese are long to celebrate Western Festivals.It has played an important role on we Chinese lives.Are you ever think about the reason of this phenomena? In my opinions,this phenomena is due to the tend of being crazed about everything from western countries.And the open and regulation of our country is the first reason.Besides,we always can be attracted by frest things. However,we must know that it may bring some bad infactions to us.On the one hand,it sometimes would make us forget our tradictional festival.On the other hand,it will make our children reconize western festivals as our country's festival and make wrong knowledge to our children.
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