2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

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computer and man with the developed rapidly of our society,more and more person are inclined to use computer. the tie between man and computer has became more tighter than before. computer is of vital importance to our lives.especially for youth. for instance,booking group-buy in internet is highly convinient for us so as to save more time and energy.futhermore, an army of middle aged person have joined the group who take mose advantages of internet. increasing products are purchased in internet so that they even do not need to take time to walk into the supermarket. what's more, it broads our eyes. effective information are available through internet. however, evrything has two coins. actually, what we should do is to avoid the weakness as we can.