句法方面做的很棒,加强复杂句的使用;文中词汇较灵活,但要注意积累学术词汇,拼写错误也要注意;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
As we know,school bullying is a very serious social issues.Now let we to talk about how to improve school safety and to build a healthy relationship environment. The main part of school bullying is mood swing about teenagers.Now, high school students have a lot of presures ,they need to use some ways to solve these feelings so that why they will to bullied someone. The second reason is come from their model ,who may be their parents or idols.Because the teenagers like to be same. Therefore, school should to improve their parents's .And most important is that campus to talking about security guard number with goverment.