拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;适当增加一些从句的使用,会为文章添彩。
Due Attention Should Be Given to the Study of Chinese With the studying of english ,ignoring study Chinese is more and more serious in students for recent years. What cause this happened? The most important reason is studying english. In the school,english has been treated as important as Chinese ,and we speak Chinese everyday because of Chinese is our mother language then students spend most of their free time to study english. In other hands, with the developing of globe economic english as a international language influence much things. So many parents send their children to cram school to study english just hope their children will have a good job. So nowadays, most of us reduce to study Chinese and read Chinese book. Meanwhile, sometimes you will found someone chat with others include english. As concerned as i am thought, to change this condition, we must balance our time, for us study Chinese is the most important, english just as a language tool to talk with foreign. So ,the majority of time we shall spend in Chinese.