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There are three brothers employed by same company earns different wages on account of their work attitude,ranged from lazy to conscientious,which makes their father so confused. It is no denying that attitude is essential to everything.From the above-mentioned story,we can learn why the wages of three brothers earn differently. We can easily discern the difference among it.It's absolutely up to whether they take it seriously or not. From the story,I know better that no matter what we may encounter big or trivial thing,I should do our best to make it.In this way,there will unexpected surprise before me. Take a example,two swimmers compete for a position that can participate an upcoming game,one is talent but lazy,the other is ordinary but down-to-earth.Though the former take advantage of the later,their coach decide to pick up the later.It is obvious and confirmed that attitude is a crucial factor.