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on the importance of a name every person have their own names.you often listening to "hi,lucy","good morning,jack"and so on.for the meaning of name,people have different opinions for this viewpoint.fllowing: some people hold a firm position that it is not sinificant for a name.they think a name like a brandlabel only a mark that it could not stand for anything.but the others think it is extremely important for name.first,such as every american.in their nations,the names ranking lean the before the man are easier to get success.the second,if you have no name,your friends and partners how to remmenber you and to call you.it is not only a symbol,not also the others recognize and shout out your name. the same as my point for this theis point,i think it is believeable which name is crucial.