2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

作者词汇基础不错，同时请加强单词拼写的检查；行文稍显不流畅，应增加文中衔接词的使用；可适当增加从句和复杂句的使用，注意文中的几处句子错误。

As time went by, computer is not a lexis for wealthy people. Everyone can afford one or use it including a man who is poor. Obviously, how to use it is a problem we all faced with. Someone makes the bussiness more convinient according to PC, while some computers are on the state where workers used be here. The fact is that a numbers guys just for fun with computers, such as playing computer games, watching movies and listening to music. I admire every thing has two sides, includes computer. I always chat with others by computer, and make friends with them. Some of them tought me a lot, expercialy boys from the others. They blost my eyes of the world, and tell me their coutrual. However, my brother are ab-sorted in online game, but lost himself in it, eventually cut his study on half. As far as i am concerned, when you use the computer, please be wisable.