2011年12月英语四级作文真题:坚强的意志

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In our life ,many factors can influence us and bring different result. It's said that people who has a strong willing could reach wonderful life. In my opinion , a strong will is the essential key to success.In the history ,many person finish powerful work because they had a common virtue .That is a strong will which inspire people to find out success.As a student ,I think we should learn study morn hard and keep a strong will to expand much knowledge.If we can insist study ,I believe we can be a success person.