题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
从句比例偏少,简单句稍微偏多了;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;文中词汇表达较灵活丰富,不过请检查文章的单词拼写。
Nowadays, The computer becomes more and more important in human daily life. The white-collar deals with their businesses on the computer, and many students also been required to do some of their homeworks on the computer. Computer changes our lives a lot since it came out. The computer brings some things good to people, but also brings some bad things to people. It becomes easier than before to do the business in company, the staff could contact with their clients by email and get the reply in a short time. And you also can share many knowledge from the internet on the computer. However, many students who can't control themselves and indulge themselve into the computer games and dilike to go to school.