2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；全文结构较为严谨，应适当增加文中衔接词的使用；文中能较熟练地使用一定的学术词汇，但词汇表达多样性不高，拼写检查还需加强。

Nowadays,excessive packaging has been part of our life.Firstly,it leads to the waste of sources in our daily life.Secondly,it make cutomers tired of packaing.All in all,it should be paid more attention to . There is no doubt that many reasons have resulted in this phenomenon.On the on hand,some people have fixed their eys on packaging when choosing things.Therefore,sellingman noticed it.On the other hand,when things product,they are not so good.Consequently,they should be on excessive to improve their quality. In my opinion,we should try our best to prevent excessive packaging.First of all,goverment ought to take some actions to warn sellingman.Then,we should focus more on quality instead of packaing.Anyway,excessive packaging will be controled in the future.