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Dear Mary Chen, Dec. 23th, 2008 Due to I will go to Beijing one week tomorrow.I can not discusion about company party with each other.It is the time for you to decide on the time and place. Last but not lease,you tell somebody the time and place.In order to have enough time to prepare to hold a party. Thank you very much. Yours sincerely, Li Ming