拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳;采用了一些简单的从句。
With the development of language,English has become world-using language.However,as we all recognize,which every country has their own Mandarian.In China,there has a phenomenon that students neglect study Chinese in recent years.There are some reasons cause this phenomenon. The school teachers are the critical killer for Chinese study.Students in school are always educated study English well is extremely important for their future.Therefore,they will have an impression that only study well is all right.In this case,the teacher become the killer in the field of English education.What's more,in contemporary education,the education with Mandarian is more and more drop out of the school education.AS a result,a majority of students can read or speak other language exclude Chinese.It is must draw attention to it for every Chinese people,students in school especially. For this peculiar issue,as far as I am concern,as a Chinese we have the duty to study our Mandarian is well,we can,and should.If we don't do this well why we endeavor to study other language?