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In contemporary society, people always stress the importance of physical health. It's true that only when our body is in good shape can we do well in other things, but this is not enough. As a real wholesome man, you should be not only physical but also mental health. Without our mental health, our lives, families and society will go into a mess and our physical health will become totally pointless. Now that spiritual world is such an essential part for people, what should school side do to guide students? It's no doubt that the first step is to diffuse the related knowledge in school to awaken pupils’ awareness of the importance of spirit. In the meantime, teachers are supposed to have the ability to find the problems students have and have a talk with them before something dreadful happen. On the other side, students themselves are the key role to improve their mental health. As a student, when we are confronted with any physiological problems that we can't deal with, we'd better to ask our parents or teachers for help rather than just thinking alone. Besides that, we ought to read more classic books, which will benefit to improve our health and build a correct psychological world.