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The Day My classmate Fell Ill Today, I heard that a classmate got injured recently, and he still in hospital. After we knew this, we were worried about his condition . Therefore, we decided to visited him played with him and taught him what we had learned when he was not in school. Except for us, our teachers went to the hospital twice a week so that our classmate who was ill could ask teachers when he met something he didn't know. What I did mostly is that I told him something interesting what happened in our school. In this days, I find that we love each other in a way what I never thought, and most of us can bring happiness to injured person. If we get injured and we are alone, we will become sadder and we don't want to talk with others. In a word, we should give our concern to people whatever happens.
