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How should parents help children to be independent Nowadays,many parents are concerned about their children most careful,which is meant to prepare anything ready for their children.On the one hand,it is a convient for children and they can focus on study,on the other hand,it is harm the chirdren's thought and reduce their ability. on my views,it is ought to let the children become more independent.They need a chance to deal with their trouble without help.In order to give freedoom for the children,as the parent,firstly,they should make them learn to take care themselves for dairy,like cooking,doing housework,make a day plan by themselves.It is important for having courage to face problem and deal with,making a correct decide.If the chilren really can be independent,it is meant that he can have own idea,not only do they look more confident but also can be a leader. Last but not least,I think parent will believe their children is smart and strength.Because of"Where there is a will,there is a way.".They need a life experience to know the world.