2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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Nowadays,it is worst that the cargoes was excessive packaged.For example,moon cake as gifts send for your friends when moon festival to come.The moon cake will be packaged excessive.It has variety kind of package.the package has enough to making the moon cake looks like gold.The circumstance is more and more worst.You may ask why.well,one of the reasons is people think that the face is the most important.The other reason is people take moon festival's advantage to send moon cake as a gift for someone to reach some process.I think excessive packaging is a bad circumstance.Because excessive packaging will lead the environment be polluted more and more.Substance resource will be waste.I have a suggestion for this circumstance is that we can use some circle metal to package cargo.