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高一英语作文模拟题:我的家乡

发布时间:2013-05-16 16:20浏览次数:22875
要求:
某英文杂志新设“我的家乡”专栏向读者征文,请按下面提供的要点写一篇100个词左右的短文,介绍你的家乡过去的情况和现在的变化,向该杂志投稿。短文标题已给出。
过去:家乡小镇绿树环抱;小河清清鱼儿嬉戏;房屋简陋 街道狭窄;人们劳作生活清贫;现在:高楼大厦厂店林立;大小车辆驰骋街头;工业发展环境恶化;树木减少鱼儿消失;治理污染当务之急。
用户的作文(系统评分77.5分
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文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但学术词汇稍显不足;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;适当增加一些从句的使用,会为文章添彩;请注意分段。

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MY home town now has been changed a lot totally different from what it used to be ,because the pollution becomes more and more serious.I love my home town used to be surrounded by trees.Besides,there were lots of fishes playing in the river whose water was very clean.What's more ,the houses people lived were very simple and the streets were too narrow to run cars,making the air fresher.Further more,people lived there worked hard and lived a hard life . Now,it has been converted.Not only can you see many high buildings,large mansions,factories and shops everywhere,but also can you see various cars run on the streets fastly.People can earn more mony and life becomes easier.But the environment has been deteriorated by the rapid development of industry.On the one way,lots of trees have been cut down to content the economic needs,on the other way numerous fishes have been disappeared because of the dirty water.There is no doubt that,it is very urgent to deal with the pollutants and improve the environment to make our life better and healthier.

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