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MY home town now has been changed a lot which was totally different from what it used to be ,because the pollution becomes more and more serious.I love my home town used to be surrounded by trees.Besides,there were lots of fishes playing in the river whose water was extremely clean.What's more,the houses people lived were very simple and the streets were too narrow to run cars,making the air cleaner.Furthermore,people lived there worked hard and lived a hard life . Now,it has been converted.Not only can you see many high buildings,large mansions and factories everywhere which make our city more prosperous,but also can you see various cars run on the streets fast.Of course,the fast development offers more jobs for us than ever before and people can live easier more comfortably.But the environment has been wrecked deeply by the rapid development of industry.On the one way,lots of trees have been cut down to content the economic needs,on the other way numerous fishes have been disappeared because of the dirty water.There is no doubt that,it is very urgent to deal with the pollutants and improve the environment to make our life better and healthier.