作者应适量增加从句的使用量;上下文衔接稍显不流畅;文章用了较为丰富的词汇,学术词汇略显单薄,同时注意单词拼写的检查。
As we all known, the interpersonal communication is the one of the most important skills in our life.Becase we are comunicating with others all the time in different places. First of all,we must improve our communication skill if we want to ear more money and have a good quality life.We must express our idears by talking and let our boss know our thing about our working,only in this way can our boss know our abillity .What's more ,we have to talk with other peaple to make good friends.Sometimes,we should express our fellings for each other when we are living with our friends,and we need to know the thinking of firends,all of these need use the way of interpersonal communication. Last but the most important everone's life need talking , we need singing,drain,and so on.It's imporsible we live lonely,our life is wonderful and colorful. All in all ,we need interpersonal communication and we need practice the skills of communicating,if we want a better life.
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