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She is my classmate in senior middle school,also,she is one of my best friends.Her name is Elle.She worked in a foreign financial company.We kept friendship over ten years.Now,she has a lovely baby.It's difficult to majority person to balance family and work.She devotes her energy to her family and work.We still keep in touch with each other more or less,sometimes we chat in QQ,sometimes by cell phone,but less and less talking face to face.She is good at foreign language and communication,also she is very kind.