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With the fastest speed of development, a increasingly number of person use internet. Accompanying with the growth of use rate, a issue has been put into spotlight. The impact of the internet on the interpersonal communication. Indeed, as far as i am concerned, balancing the advantages and disadvantages is of great importance for us. On one hand , the internet offer us more and more opportunity to know and understand the strangers from all over the world. It can also connect us with globalization so as to be a "earth country". Furthermore, our vision can also be broaden . On the other hand, there are,However, also weakness resulting in the worsen situation between relatives and friends. Nevertheless, the characteristics can be converted from out-going into the quiet. Therefore, we should pay great attention to the situation .
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