2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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Many products have the excessive packaging phenominon at present.Some products have colorful packaging and perfect advertisement.Because most the businessmen pay more attention on profit, not the customers' heath. In my opinion,to avoiding the excessive packaging,we should come up a plan which not concern about the packaging ,but make the product more reality.Our goverment should carry out the rules to let the industries produce the high quality product. As a student,I should learn how to make a difference between the packaging and improve my comsume'view.