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Nowadays,many parents like helping their children planning anything.For example.children's weekend should how to spend or which school should be chosen for their children.It is a badly condition that children's everything was planned by their parents.Parents positive to help their children planning anything that will cause their more and more liking depend on their parents.If these children have met something bad that they would not have enough ability to deal with it.So parents should help children to be independent.How to do it?I have some ideals.Firstly,parents should teach and permit their children state their own oppion in ordinary.secondly,parent should admit children to plan their time.finally,when children met some troubles parents should let children think how to deal with it at once.