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How I Finance My College Education There are many ways to earn enough money to afford your college life,and before I started my college life,I have thought many ways to earn money to afford my life,but until I began my study,I found it is not easy to do it,because the courses is more then I thought,especially when I took part in some organization,the rest time for myself is much less. Even if there are many limits for me to earn money,I have many ways to do it.Because we can get money by getting resours and experiences from all kinds of your classes and other activities.Just like we can build a small shop by ourself,and find customers from the activities and your classes.At weekends,you can do some part time job,such like handout papers,sale goods at some places,or you can teach children by do a home-teacher like you have meet when you are young. Every thing can be true only if you want to do and you start to do,and there are many ways for you to hoose to earn money for your college life.