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In recently,increasing of parents are doing everything what the child needs.The parents thinks about children's living,studying,even in career.With the growing up under the parents protect,children will be dependent with parents more and more. How should parents help children to be independent?As far as I'm concerned,parents should do something for children independent.It's the ultimate is that don't do everything for children.When children gets into trouble,parents should encourage with them and let them to solve the problems by themselves .It's benefice for them grow up and learn how to handle the problem.So them will be independent on thinking.Parents should as a light and lighting their children,leading them to success.