字数:200满分:100分
拼写做的很棒,学术词汇可适量增加;文中一些从句的使用为文章增色;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨。
should we be protected by our parents or others? As the picture depicted, a flower blossoms beautifully, because it is put into the a room which keeps its from being blown away and rained. However, it became wither and fall without shelter. hence, it makes us reflect on ourselves. There are so many obstacles in our life, we can't choose avoiding those difficulties. Confronted with such barriers, we will become more strong when we overcome those obstacles or we can benefit from it. There are some perspectives as follows. As the development of economy, people seem to lead an affluent life, thus, many typical parents prefer giving their children the better things, even some people may ignore the things they offer their children, maybe the things itself are not beneficial for their children's growth. On the other hand, we are the typical children who are under the control of our parents, what we want or like, we don't try our best to acquire it, we only ask our parents to meet our need, it may cause the habits of waste or we will not cherish the things we get. On the other hand, we are protected well, when faced with so many difficulties, we will don't know how to figure out the issues by ourselves, and we lack the ability of tackling problems, so we can't compete with the other people when we fight for the limited chances. All in all, we should encounter some obstacles, whatever the size of problems, we should know how to handle it by ourselves. Furthermore, parents should not protect their children forever, because the children should be out of protection, they can learn more knowledge from difficulties.