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morden,many family have one child.they like thire baby ,and give anything what children want to own.many children eat the best thing,play the mordenest toy,if parents don't buy for them,they will cry much long time.never understand the mind of parents.so morden children who only know themshelf.they don't study,they become fat,they have a bad healthy,when they adaulty,they nearly don't know how to alive.they can't take care of themself.when they grow up,they maybe aslo est from thire parents.because they don't know how to adapt the quickly development social.we must consider this serious mistake.what caused by parents.we must change the methrod of education.make health condition for children's grow up.this is for the future of children.for this ,they will thanks us. ps.
