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Nowadays,Online Shopping has been popular with common people. It is benefical for us to shop online.First,it brings us more convenience to buy the goods which we want but has little around us.Second,the price is more cheaper than what we buy in the store.Finally,we can also get touch with vivid life online. Nonetheless,there are some disadvantages as well.Not only will cost us more time and energy but also a part of people who even are adicited in Online Shopping.Apart from that,some will buy some attractive thing but without need. In my view,what I thought is that we should shopping online in a proper way.We are supposed to buy the thing online while thinking whether it is worth buying it.
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