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Great changes have taken place in my hometown.In the past,aroud my hometown there were so many trees.All kinds of fish swam in the river freely.The houses were neither big nor beautiful and the streets were narrow.Now,people in my hometown live in a higher standard of living.A lot of tall buildings are built in modern style.Malls sells fashionable clothes.Cars run on the wide road.But as the industry develop quikly,the environment problem has been more serious.The number of trees decreases and some kind of fish even disappear.So it's our duty to try our best to deal with pollution.