题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Nowadays,more and more people use the computer in the work, study and their life.There are many reasons for this phenomenon.Above all,with the development of economy,production costs of computer are less and less.More and more people could buy it.Secondly,people need to find some in formation and do some work with the computer.What's more ,people can,by using computer,save the time. However,following the computer enter our daily life and can't be replaced,people get more rely on it.The children are not able to write, young men waste time in the web or play games. All of those,tell us the relationship of computer and men need concerned and solved.On the one hand,we shouldn't more rely on it.we have ourselves life that have our family,friends and work.we must return our true life.On the other hand,we should be reasonable to use the computer.Let it become our partner and useful tool.