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Tina is going to BeiJing.She like to see the Great Wall.Jim wants to stay at home to lhave fun .Because he is too tired ,he wants to have a rest at home .I would like to go to somewhere cool with my family.such as north of China.and I also want to to waterpark .It's cool to swim in the water.