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There are many famous people in the world,and them also teach me that "Never give up."And a people is important for me,because he teaches me never give up finishing my dream.He is Micheal Jordon, one of the best basketball player. After I know him,I decide to be a play who like Jordon,because I love basketball. In order to make dream come sure,I will practise playing basketball every day.I will find a teacher to teach me. Lastly,I think I must be finish my dream by practise playing basketball every day!