初中英语命题作文真题演练(69):长大后

文中词汇表达贫乏，但是单词拼写做的不错；可适当增加长句和复杂句的使用；上下文衔接不流畅，文章结构不严谨。

There are many famous people in the world,and them also teach me that "Never give up."And a people is important for me,because he teaches me never give up finishing my dream.He is Micheal Jordon,one of the best basketball player. After I know him,I decide to be a player who likes Jordon,because I love basketball. In order to make dream come sure,I will practise playing basketball every day.I will find a teacher to teach me. Lastly,I think I must be finish my dream by practise playing basketball every day!